*clap clap clap* Again a marvelous work from you and Lai. It was just amazing and very well though out. The transitions of the colors of you going into the darkness and following the words of Lai was very intense and clever. But I do have to say I was a tiiiny bit confused on the text part either with the color or font. May I suggest (if I so may) same font, but different colors between you and Lai or any other characters that may appear later on in the story. The intro of the beings was very beautifully thought out. Of the cliff hang leaves everyone dying for more as well as wanting to go through the experience you were going through with the guidance of Lai. The colors were unique and interesting, and the story line is very clean. Continue with the great work Madam Kurama-fox!!!
"logic does nothing more than tell you something you already know." - Robert Heinlein
that quote logged in my mind as i started tearing up with lai's guidance and your own self revelations. as always, you have awed me with your ability to delve into yourself; and earth the precious gems that lay buried beneath. I'm a bit too chocked up at all of this to give a fair review, but you've outdone yourself yet again my dear.
GORGEOUS Quote! <3 *loves and saves to bring it up in the right moment* * U *
Tearing up? Oh my, sweet did this story touch you so much? ;; U ;; *huggles gently on you and stays like that; with both arms entwined around your waist* I am so happy you enjoyed it.. I truly am, because it means a lot to me.. You're always so compassionate, so understanding! That is very important to me *smiles* :'') Thank you so much; I love you, Zel. You know I do <3333
"any sufficiently advanced technology is indistinguishable from magic - aurther c. clark
i do indeed and return it with no less enthusiasm or compassion. you mean the world to me dear! *huggms!!!!!*
and yes, it did indeed. i could see the depths at which you where trying to dive into yourself with it. i could see the effort you put to annul your own mental walls and restrains for the characters. i could even see the loving embrace of lai's concern without coddling. i think the reason it touched me so is becasue you where succeeded so well at what i was trying to hard to accomplish in many ways. i got a bit envious and angry at myself before, so that is why i waited to review anything. >///////////>
i still need to go though and actually give a good look at your lovely new characters, but will wait for the right time and mindset! besides...story reply is probably gonna come first. *giggle*
This is a really amazing idea hun you've become so frigging creative its not even fair! But I'm sooo glad that you keep moving forward and trying things out that are really unique. Ps; I want a pet Lai ;_;
O A O I am so damn glad you like it! > u < Makes me look at all my efforts as a well invested time! <3<3<3<3 Oh yeah ^^ I am always looking for some sort of a challenge ^___^ Admittedly there is enough of it in my life ^^ *smiles*
P.S. You wish Lai to make a pet for you? XDDDDD Because I doubt he will make one of 'him' XDDDDDD But for the first one... I could ask XD
I can understand that completely, the feeling of wanting to challenge yourself even though life is challenging as it is-_-... Oh how I wish I could make sexy bishounen men instead of moe moe girls @....@ I must practice my men more so I can design my damn males for the novel I'm writing *dies*
Ps; T_T Do you know how many people would be happy if lai could replicate himself... LOL Would be frigging amazing >.< Smexy Lai's everywhere ... *passouts*
I think each of you is able to go through the same experience ^___^ It's not that hard actually; I meditate from time to time *smiles* It helps you relax. I usually I close the door to my room, make some hot tea and sip it while sitting with closed eyes on my couch; surrounded by tons of pillows and my whole fox army ^^ If you let go of the real world for a bit and deepen into the darkness of your mind, you'll find quite a lot of interesting things ^^
Thank you very much for such a sweet comment! I am very happy to know, that you people can follow my thoughts! You know? xD I am drawing, drawing, drawing and afterwards am like "I guess none will understand that shit" XDD
The steps of life and one dream show through transparency of mere nothing is brilliant! I understand it quite well. And the beings that describe them is very clever. I do ever so look forward to the next section.
I am so happy you like the way the story turns out to be; besides thank you so much for your wonderful critique!! <3<3 *smiles* I shall keep your suggestions in mind for my further work! Thank you for being so honest with me I will probably keep the text passages in the same font style for the last flash document of our little 'experiment' ^____^ But to make it easier for you to read, I shall remember your suggestion and use the same fonts but different colors; you're right it probably will be better *bows head in respect*
Thank you! <3 It's a good thing; I wished it to be rather unpredictable *smiles* Makes you curious and me happy about your future reactions *smiles* It's only half fun if you already know where the story is heading, right? ;D
"I think I understand why transparency is important." OH MY GOD LAI'S FACE LOOK AT HIS FACE I KNOW YOU SEE IT A LOT BUT LOOK AT HIM AND HOW BEAUTIFUL AND WISE HE IS AND MY GOD THAT SMIRK LOOK AT HIM AND HIS PERFECT TEETH EVEN HIS TEETH ARE BEAUTIFUL. And the page after it is so beautiful detailed what am I saying, all of it is beautiful and amazingly detailed I just love it, I just do!
AND after this point I sort of spaz out because the fore-coming pages about the oceans, caves, memories and everything after just lead me to believe you're an incredibly creative person and I feel just utterly hypnotised reading this, it really and honestly is just THAT AMAZING.
AND OH MY GOD WHY DID IT END LIKE THAT I WANT TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENED HOW COULD YOU DO THIS TO ME?!?!!?!??! D': *inconcievable depression*
Me: Go on flattering him and me might come over XDDDDDD ..... wait.... THAT'S NOT your intention, IS IT?! !(O n O °°) Lai: >) The young lady shares an exquisite taste, what can I say? *chuckles* Me: NO LAI, OI! (= n = ;; )
Oh my, thank you so much for your appreciation, really! I do not usually tend to open myself that much in one piece, as I did here; but Lai is provocative enough to make me do such things. Admittedly it's a good practice with self honesty. And of course every time I do so, I fear a bit that people might either misunderstand me or well... use. But I do not regret things I do; so I think being honest with my watchers is as important as being honest with myself ^^
I feel deeply touched by your comment, as I think you might have a good understanding of the direction I was heading in! Perhaps we both share some distinct similarities :''D
And...... sorry XD *laughs* The more interesting the third part will be for you then ;D Third, and for now the last ^^
No, no, surely not, no! *devious eyes* I would never think of something so sinister...!
In all honestly, it was awe inspiring, awesome in it's literal meaning. I can't even begin to describe what I saw, it was just...creativity given life, to put a poetic spin on things xD but I felt like I was in your head for a moment, like I could see your intrepretation of every day things in living, breathing creatures - the idea in and of itself is amazing and for you to openly express that just futher demostrates your sense of creative innovation. (hopefully this comment is correct and does not totally stray from what you intended the audience to experience xD)
Who knows xD great minds think alike haha
*inconcievable depression* Oh my god it's ending! I'm so pumped to read the last bit it sounds so exciting!! *"ASDFGHJKL" moment*
No. I did not create Seth. Seth is much too... devilish. I created Drell. Though he can be rather cruel as well... <3 He's my baby. He's my only one. I am going to work on another though. I'm so very excited about it.
That you'll see very soon; I've already decided *grins* Not without his approval, but he didn't wish to argue much; aaaaand so I think Lai was actually planning that as well ;D
No, no; I haven't assumed that ; ) Seth appears to be very lively, it's the same about me and Lai, so I know what you mean : ) I do not tend to create OC's, actually I don't really need any; Calir is more of my personality and a character from a book project. But he lives inside and does not walk the path along with me, as a devilish gentleman we both know does ; )
I am indeed curious what you'll come up with! ^ 7 ^ *smiles brightly* If you need any assistance, ask sweet <3
Well I created Drell for a reason and he is marked to fulfill his purpose till my death. I have another thing I need so I have to create another. ^.^ Thanks though. Hopefully by next week I will have what I need.
Oh? :'') Then I hope to be able to see it ^^ *smiles* But don't die on me, will you?! xD *pets head* So the characters you create play a specific role in what you're being part in, I see. Sounds indeed like a devilish plan to me :'')